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Post by sourcespeaks on Apr 21, 2006 9:45:50 GMT -5
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Post by sourcespeaks on Apr 21, 2006 10:21:05 GMT -5
Dry tears of lost souls Only in the silence of the word Only in the darkness of the light Is bright the eagles flight In the empty sky. ________ Creation of Ea________________ CH1 It was dark as the stormy clouds slowly flooded the empty streets in front of the shadowy castle.The girl noticed violent lighting smashing depressive trees as she closed the red blood curtains.The night was as dead as death itself but she could hear,she could hear trees crying her name,Ginny,Ginny. She sat one her bed making a bottle drop.As bend down ,she noticed a pair of black shoes with black shoe laces quite closed to her. "Ive seen this shoes before "she thought.She paused a minute or so and looked slowly up wards. "Harry!!!"she cried as she jumped in his arms.She started crying. "I love you!!!".Harry put his arms around her gently over lapping his head against hers. They started kissing passionately.Harry took of his glasses and pushed Ginny back and said out of breath,"I'll never leave you again Ginny,do you hear me NEVER!!!"he started kissing her again.They sat on the bed still kissing and stopped.They then started talking. Next time :  What really happened between harry and Ginny   And what about Ron and Hermione   Just tune in tomorrow same place same website!!! ;D ;D ;D  |
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Post by misticpotter on May 1, 2006 22:00:14 GMT -5
Hey what happend to tomorrow?? Its past and i want more..LOL
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Post by Hermione on May 13, 2006 11:11:14 GMT -5
Same here!
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Post by sourcespeaks on May 13, 2006 11:44:53 GMT -5
Soz im just writing it in rough first to see something it'll come soon inof
Coming soon :
Dry tears of lost souls part II
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Post by Hermione on May 14, 2006 11:20:16 GMT -5
Don't keep me in suspense!!!!!!
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Post by sourcespeaks on May 15, 2006 11:03:21 GMT -5
ho well!!
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Post by Hermione on May 15, 2006 14:51:29 GMT -5
I hate you!  Not really!  |
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Post by powerof111 on May 29, 2006 9:16:24 GMT -5
Very romantic |
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Post by Hermione on May 29, 2006 17:43:45 GMT -5
A bit too romantic, if you know what I mean!
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Post by powerof111 on May 30, 2006 8:56:15 GMT -5
Yes I do lol By the way when's th next one coming Lilly? |
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Post by Hermione on May 30, 2006 15:03:16 GMT -5
Soon (hopefully!)
Just a tinsy, winsy bit of critisism, Lilly:
"As bend down ," should be "As she bent down" I think.
"with black shoe laces quite closed to her." should be somethig like "with black shoe laces quite close to her."
"Harry put his arms around her gently over lapping his head against hers." I don't quite understand what you're trying to say. Maybe you should try and say what you want to express more clearly.
"as she closed the red blood curtains" Cut the "red blood" bit. It's a terrible cliche.
When you're talking about Harry's shoes could you think of other adjectives apart from "black"? It gets a bit repetitive.
All these comments are just suggestions. Other than that it's a very dramatic and emotional piece with lots of atmosphere. Well done Lilly!
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Post by sourcespeaks on Jun 9, 2006 2:18:54 GMT -5
Yes wot ever now im sos so mso so sorry but i really need to continue it but i just didnt have the time
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Post by Hermione on Jun 10, 2006 4:38:08 GMT -5
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Post by sourcespeaks on Jun 21, 2006 9:14:56 GMT -5
sorry it took so long but i was really bussy with my french GCSE aniway here it is : CH2 "I love you Ginny,I don't know why i left you for Cho ,"he exclaimed from the bottom of his heart holding Ginny's hands.Ginny look down.Slowly,a salty clear tear drop dropped on her lap.Harry touched her chin and pushed it up showing her wet face.Harry made a semi-circle with his thumb wiping a trace of crying on her face. "There , there it's going to be alright ,"he murmered in his hear# "I so sorry harry !!!"shouted Ginny on Harry's shoulder. "Mmmmm...will you be quite i'm trying to sleep here,"moaned Ron in his greenish pyjamas.Harry laughed and all lights went down .It was pitch dark. "Aaaaaaaaaand...Cut!!!"shouted a voice in the distence ... To be continued...What is happening ??
Find out in the next chapter of ...
Dry tears of lost souls !!!Ooh...naughty writer HAHA i left you in suspence LOL!!! |
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& Harry and Ginny 
